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Ms. Smith: After reading your paper's I am happy to say that everybody's paper was pretty good, but their was one paper that really caught my attention. Hanna would you mind reading your paper aloud to the class?
Hanna: Education has always been important, Hanna read aloud the purpose of this paper is to explain the importance of education, and how it reflects on our future......
Ms. Smith: Who or what inspired you to write this essay in the way that you did?
Hanna: My sister she doesn't think she smart enough for college.
Ms. Smith: After reading your…
Hanna: Hey Laura, I wanted you to look at something, I think you would be very interested.
Laura: If it's about school, you can forget it! I told you, I'm not smart enough, I'm happy with my job at the pet store.
Hanna: I just wanna see you be successful, did you know that you could take classes that deals with animals?
Laura: Really! Oh I would love that!
Hanna: Let's get you signed up.
Hanna: Hey Laura, I wanted yo…
Hanna: Education, is the key to success, without education I will be not be able to fulfill my dreams as a nurse, Hanna writes.
Joesph: Hey Hanna I see that you enrolled this semester at college, where Laura?
Hanna: She doesn't think that her education is very important.
Joesph: Maybe you should convince her to to take one or two classes just to see if she would like it.
Hanna: Great idea Joesph, I'll see if I can try.
Hanna: Education, is the key …
Hanna: My first day of school is going to be so great, thought Hanna, I wonder if my teacher is going to be nice.
Ms. Smith: Today class we are going to write an essay about education, and what it means to you. This essay has to be at least two pages long, feel free to come to my office during my office hours. I also strongly encourage you to go to the Writing Center to help get feed back on your essay. This center is included in your tuition and it's free.
Hanna: English isn't one of my subjects so I guess I should go to the writing center for help.
Hanna: My first day of school…
Laura: Hey Hanna, what are you doing?
Hanna: Just applying for college, why aren't you looking into any colleges?
Laura: I just don't think college is for me, I was never really good in school any way I think I'll just keep my job at the pet store.
Hanna: We'll I think you should apply for school, I heard you say the other night that you hated that job.
Laura: I do hate my job, but it pays the bills.
Laura: Hey Hanna, what are yo…
Barbie:"Now i realize just how important school is, I'll finally be that big designer i dream of". That's the spirit!, says Chris
Barbie:"Now i realize just ho…
Teacher: What do you want to be when you grow up? I want to create designs. In fact, here's one i created, says barbie excitedly. beautiful! says the teacher. Someday I want to be a great designer. And i know you can do it, says the teacher. But you can't do it without school. It will help you reach your goal. When you finish, you can be anything you want to be. Barbie thinks about it for a bit and then she smiles
Teacher: What do you want to …
Come on, we are going to the library right now! I know there must be something you'll like! exclaims sky. ok, ok i'll go! says barbie.
Come on, we are going to the …
I'm working on an assignment, we have to write a literacy narrative, says barbie. What's that? asks sky, barbie's sister. Our experience with writing and reading, says barbie. That sounds like a fun and easy assignment! says sky. Well, I like to write says barbie, But i find reading to be really boring!
I'm working on an assignment,…
Hey! the name of the video is "Why i hate school but love education"! pretty interesting, says Chris. Ha! says barbie, he got the first part right. Look, don't be so negative about this barbie, says Bradley. Lets just watch this and see what we learn.
Hey! the name of the video is…
 Do you know why you come to school everyday? asks the teacher. I only come because my parents make me, says barbie, as the class laughs. The teacher chuckles. today we will watch a video that will explain it's importance
Do you know why you come to …
That was a pretty strong statement you made earlier in class, Bradley says to barbie. Barbie shrugs. But you know, coming to school can be very fun because you can learn lots of new things says Chris. Well i have the video here that the teacher wanted us to watch, lets pop this in and see what the big deal is, says barbie.
That was a pretty strong stat…
Barbie makes it to computer class just before the bell rings. As soon as class begins, Barbie raises her hand. "Yes, Barbie?" asks Ms. Smith, the teacher. "If your computer gets a virus and crashes, how can you retrieve all the files you lost?" asks Barbie.
Barbie makes it to computer c…
I GONAN COMPUTER ;)
I GONAN COMPUTER ;)
I GONAN GAME ;)
I GONAN GAME ;)
"Damn! I missed registration for the Grace Hopper Celebration!" Barbie cried, frustrated. "I just got those business cards printed, too, I was going to network my ass off!"
"Damn! I missed registration …
"Your laptop stays here. Go. To. Sleep!" "Okay, okay" laughs Barbie. "Just don't post anything embarrassing on my Facebook page. I'm still signed in."
"Your laptop stays here. Go. …
"That's it." says Skipper and she pulls the laptop away. "Your eyes are popping out of your head. I know coding is addictive but this is not a hackaton. It's a school night! You need to go to bed Barbie!"
"That's it." says Skipper and…
"Your robot puppy is so sweet," says Skipper. "Can I play your game?" "That's why I need to find the coding error, Skipper" says Barbie. "Right now the robot puppy is meowing like a cat!"
"Your robot puppy is so sweet…
That night, Skipper still finds Barbie glued to her screen. "Shouldn't you take a break?" Skipper says. "No way" says Barbie. "I wanna find the mistake before Brian or Steve do."
That night, Skipper still fin…
"It will go faster if Brian and I help," offers Steven. "Great!" says Barbie. Here, Steven, I'll share my hard drive with you on the network. And then we're out of ports, so Brian, here's you go. You've got an old MacBook that still has a CD drive, right? The code's on there as well."
"It will go faster if Brian a…
After class, Barbie meets with Steven and Brian in the library.  "Hey Barbie, do you wanna go grab a coffee?" "No, I can't" Barbie says. There's an error somewhere in my code and I just can't find it. I'm not moving until I found it. Bring me a Latte, will you?"
After class, Barbie meets wit…
The next morning, Barbie gives her sister a big surprise. Skipper turns on her laptop--and finds a new game installed. "It's called 'Bunny Hop', says Barbie. "And I designed it just for you!"
The next morning, Barbie give…
I'm so excited about learning how to code! It is going to help me to create websites and games and really cool apps.
I'm so excited about learning…
"FUCKBOYS EVERYWHERE, DISTURBING MY BEAUTIFUL WORK WITH THEIR UGLY FACES!!!!!!!" Barbie screams when Ken and Brian walks into the library. Tears appears in their eyes and they walk away.
"FUCKBOYS EVERYWHERE, DISTURB…

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