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 Hanna: "Hey Joesph"!, Hannah said when she saw Joesph in the writing center.I got Laura to enroll in school and she loves it!
Joesph: Wow that's awesome, I'm really glad that she decided to go to school after all.
Hanna: Hanna replied back, "me too"!
Hanna: "Hey Joesph"!, Hannah…
Well, well, well look who decided to put her computer away and participate with her classmates. Thank you Barbie.

Hello Ms. Smith, my sister helped me realize that my future is too important to waist.
Well, well, well look who dec…

It is the 22nd century. Barbara sits in her history class where they are learning about the 21st century and their problems. 




“Today, class, we will be learning about the history of Zombie media. In the 21st century, they believed that by infectious disease there would be a zombie apocalypse. This is expressed through the time’s media.” said Ms. Turner.
It is the 22nd century. Barb…
Hanna: "Hey Laura"!, said Hanna, how did you first day of class go?
Laura: It went well I really love my teacher's, you were right getting your education is important. I decided to go to school full-time after all! Thank you Hanna, your the best! said Laura.
Hanna: I'm glad I was able to change your mind, I'm going to go study now. Bye!
Hanna: "Hey Laura"!, said Han…
Now come outside and let's play volleyball, or go hangout with some friends.

Alright I will, I miss hanging out.
Now come outside and let's pl…
Jessica! What are you doing with my computer?

Barbie I am taking away your computer because you are too young to be online chatting, and I don't want you to do something you may regret.
Jessica! What are you doing w…
Hanna: Hey Laura!, I wanted you to look at something, I think you would be very interested.
Laura: If it's about school, you can forget it! said Laura. I told you, I'm not smart enough, I'm happy with my job at the pet store.
Hanna: I just wanna see you be successful, said Hanna, in a concerned voice. Did you know that you could take classes that deals with animals?
Laura: "Really"! said Laura Oh I would love that!
Hanna: Let's get you signed up then said Hanna.
Hanna: Hey Laura!, I wanted y…
 Hanna: Education, is the key to success! Without education I will be not be able to fulfill my dreams as a nurse, Hanna writes.
Joesph: "Hey Hanna"! said Joesph when he see's Hanna. I see that you enrolled this semester at college, where's Laura?
Hanna: She doesn't think that her education is very important replied, Hanna.
Joesph:  What a bummer! said Joesph. Maybe you should convince her to to take one or two classes just to see if she would like it.
Hanna: Great idea Joesph, I'll see if I can try.
Hanna: Education, is the key…
Look Barry there goes your friend Barbie.  Ya, but she doesn't really talk to me much anymore since she has gotten that computer.
Look Barry there goes your fr…
Hanna: My first day of class is going to be so great, thought Hanna, I wonder if my teacher is going to be nice?
Ms. Smith: "Today class we are going to write an essay about education, and what it means to you. This essay has to be at least two pages long, feel free to come to my office during my office hours. I also strongly encourage you to go to the Writing Center to help get feed back on your essay. This center is included in your tuition and it's free" said, Mrs. Smith
Hanna: "English isn't one of my favorite subjects so I guess I should go to the writing center for help Hanna thought to herself".
Hanna: My first day of class …
So this is one of pictures that Barbie is sending to all these strangers.
So this is one of pictures th…
Sis, do you ever give that computer a rest? 

You don't understand Jessica I am meeting so many guys from all over.  

Barbie you should be careful because you don't even know these guys.
Sis, do you ever give that co…
 Laura: "Hey Hanna", what are you doing?
Hanna says, Just applying for college, why aren't you looking into any colleges?
Laura replied back, I just don't think college is for me, I was never really good in school anyway I think I'll just keep my job at the pet store.
Hanna: "We'll I think you should apply for school, I heard you say the other night that you hated that job", Laura said sternly.
Laura responded, I do hate my job, but it pays the bills.
Laura: "Hey Hanna", what are…
"We free'd the niggers!"
"We free'd the niggers!"
Barbie what's up? 

O, hi Barry, hi Chris. Look at the Cd I made, that I am going to send to a guy I met in Orlando, Florida.
Barbie what's up? O, hi Bar…
 Laura: "Hey Hanna", what are you doing?
Hanna says, Just applying for college, why aren't you looking into any colleges?
Laura replied back, I just don't think college is for me, I was never really good in school anyway I think I'll just keep my job at the pet store.
Hanna: "We'll I think you should apply for school, I heard you say the other night that you hated that job", Laura said sternly.
Laura responded, I do hate my job, but it pays the bills.
Laura: "Hey Hanna", what are…
Look Barry there goes your friend Barbie. 

Ya, but she doesn't really talk to me much anymore since she has gotten that computer.
Look Barry there goes your fr…
Hi big sis, would you like to go outside and play volleyball with me. 

Naw, I'm searching singles websites for hot guys!
Hi big sis, would you like to…
Mrs. Smith take a look at the picture that I sent to a sexy guy that I meet from a singles website that lives New York.

Barbie you are too young to be talking to a guy online, especially one that lives so far away.
Mrs. Smith take a look at the…
Wow my very own first computer. I am so happy. Now I can chat with all my friends online at anytime.  Since my mom is hardly around I can also go to some singles websites.
Wow my very own first compute…
hello
hello
After class, Barbie meets with Steven and Brian in the library. "Hi, guys," I've finished the coding and just need someone to do the final testing. Do you know a woman who could help?
After class, Barbie meets wit…
Oh Steven, you are soooo clever.  would you like to hang out?
Oh Steven, you are soooo clev…
"I'm so sorry, Skipper," says Barbie. "I have to run off to school now. But don't worry, I can fix your laptop." "You better!" Skipper replies as she playfully hits Barbie with a pillow.
"I'm so sorry, Skipper," says…
"This is my teacher." says Barbie. "Although school may not seem important right now, my teacher will show me how it will be beneficial in the end. She may still be paying off student loans while being in her mid thirties, but at least she is independent and educated."
"This is my teacher." says Ba…

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